Praetoria, Tami Baker's story arc, Destroying the Destroyers:
Part One: Skeletons. The clue that you get from the computer, Praetor White and the Destroyers. Fourth paragraph, first sentence reads, "We have strong reason to believe that many of older Destroyers were actually part of Praetor White's former gang." Should read, "We have strong reason to believe that many of the older Destroyers were actually part of Praetor White's former gang."
Part Four: Meet with Praetor Duncan:
Text after you say, "Cole is still keeping you around, after all that?", middle of second paragraph, "... that he was the one who was this whole mess with the Destroyers." Should be "... that he was the one who was behind this whole mess with the Destroyers."
Third paragraph: "Of course, I didn't get off so easily, little Marcus told me I couldn't play with my Destroyers anymore, so there goes that whole bit of fun." Should be two sentences: "Of course, I didn't get off so easily. Little Marcus told me I couldn't play with my Destroyers anymore, so there goes that whole bit of fun."
Praetor Duncan's reply, after your dialog choice, "Maybe I am. But today I won, and you lost." Either the last line should be moved up to the end of the second paragraph, or the last sentence of the second paragraph should be moved to the start of the third, and they should be separated with a colon instead of a period. So "But you should know this, Character. <paragraph> When I get the chance ..." should be "But you should know this, Character: when I get the chance ..."
Praetoria: Chimera/Praetor Sinclair, initial contact text. "I'm well aware of what your motives might be; power, fame, glory, all or perhaps just one." Change the semi-colon to a colon, and should probably make the last part a separate sentence. So, "I'm well aware of what your motives might be: power, fame, glory. All or perhaps just one."
Also, his last line, "I am putting my trust towards you, the trust of a Praetor." Technically correct, but weird wording. Should probably be, "I am putting my trust in you, the trust of a Praetor."