First attempt...has gone thru several refinements...looking for feedback!

[NathanDuff2]

Would love it if some of you AE experts gave feedback on my attempt at an origin story for my character...Arc ID #42922 "Joule's Revenge."

 

[NathanDuff2]

Specific questions:

 

Where is nav text missing or unclear?

Should there be more clues along the way?

Did you come across any broken text? (I used numbers as placeholders as I was creating, and may have left some in...but didn't find any on playthrough.)

 

Thanks!