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  1. In Striga ch. 4, Lars says: In "but first ... first", one of the firsts should not be there.
  2. In the evil double mission from Keith Nance, the double says when I defeated her in the sewers: The other double (triple?) is of course also female, so "he" should be "she" there. The rest of the mission uses singular they, which is perfect. (iow: "he isn't still alive" should be "they aren't still alive".) At the end of the next mission, Jenny Adair says: "She" is correct there (at least for my character), but it seems weird given that singular they is used everywhere else in the mission (including in this same screenshot).
  3. Shauna Braun's says: It says "the apartment" twice, but earlier (and also here) it's obviously about an entire building. So it should be "the apartment building", or "the apartments".
  4. At the end of Marchand's New Praetorians missions, he says: In that last sentence, "then" should be "that".
  5. "where one of the hotspots are" should either be "where the hotspots are" or "where one of the hotspots is".
  6. "I have never know" should be "I have never known".
  7. In "Save Anti-Matter's Reactor and Neutropolis", there is a message when the mission starts: "It's up to you know" should be "It's up to you now".
  8. In Praetorian Responsibility, Mother says "she's apart of" should be "she's a part of".
  9. Neutropolis power storyline, Neuron says: "I get to make once from scratch" should be "I get to make one from scratch".
  10. In a clue from the Revenant Hero Project, it says "body body"; only one of those should be there.
  11. In "Catch Agent Sampson" from Operative Vargas, the clue at the end contains "I'll tell you where to go to intercept the next the next drop." It should say "the next" only once.
  12. And at the end of that same mission, the kidnapped guy says: "you're powers" should be "your powers". And immediately after, when turning it in, Chalmers says: That first "You" should be "Your".
  13. In "operation skyhook", Lt. Chalmers says: There's an operation we would like to perform, a heist of sorts. In order to do it properly we have to throw the trail off of ourselves, and keep the victim guessing who the real culprit is. Now, that would entail pinning the blame on another, and while I can't tell you who we'd be stealing from or what we'd be taking until you agree, I can tell you that Wyvern would be the targets of the frame-up. You've shown that your capable, and that you can finish contracts you start. Both useful qualities for this, so I'm offering the job to you. Tell me if you're interested. "your capable" should be "you're capable".
  14. Lorenz Ansaldo says: "he got some bait" should be "we got some bait".
  15. Redside origins of power, technology origin character, talking to technology origin contact (golden roller): Technology is "amoral", not "a moral".
  16. In a rogue->hero tip mission, it says: That last part should be "posing AS you ON the internet".
  17. Seer Marino says: The sentence is a bit weird anyway, but it would at least be grammatically correct if "it's" is changed to "its". But even then, I would expect the body to be the evidence that betrays us, not the body's evidence. So it may be better to rewrite the sentence. Then again, I'm not a native speaker, so this may be perfectly good English.
  18. Huh, interesting. Learned something new today. Thanks. 🙂
  19. In the introduction of a villain alignment mission, it says: "another think coming" should be "another thing coming".
  20. In the vigilante -> villain tip mission "edit the children's tape", is says "Instead of ... they .... instead". That second "instead" should not be there.
  21. After killing a knight of Malta, Crimson says: In the second paragraph, "there have always been an unseen hand" should be "there has ..." (or possibly "they have ...")
  22. In "Find Joe's Records" from Crimson, a clue named "Mrs. Boxer's story" contains this: "may years" should be "many years".
  23. In one of Crimson's missions, a clue says "hear" which should in this context be "here".
  24. Kyle Peck in Steel Canyon says after a mission: "nothing sort of brilliant" should be "nothing short of brilliant".
  25. In Operation: World Wide Red, Crimson says this: "We're gonna need your help more a lot more" should have less more. And later, in the clue "Jack Firenze's latest story", it talks about a "Coup de tat". That should be spelled "Coup d'état".
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