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Leviathan 1 has been republished (and an apology to the Twitch team that ran it)


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Just watched the twitch stream by MollyMauk & partners. Unfortunately, the party failed the finale, because something ran off. 

 

No, do I remember setting it up that way? Nope. But evidently I did, and that sucks.  Obviously the arc needs a fix on that (and other things as well), because failing the finale shouldn't happen. This one is ALL on me. The bad news: the danged thing is a Dev's Choice (to be frank a surprising one, as it's just an opening to a longer story). So I can't make any changes  to that one without pulling it down (I don't think). That said, I'm so disappointed in that outcome I may do it anyone. An unsatisfying finale just ain't fair.  

 

I have removed the failure condition (Boss flees). Lost the DC seal, but that's okay. I'll probably do a few other things with it before I am done.

 

My apologies to those who slogged through that (esp that back and forth in M4), only to get a "fail" message. However, thanks to you, no one else will have to suffer such a bullshit ending. I hope this doesn't put you off the rest of the arc, and my other, more polished stories. (I did get better later on, I think. But you can tell me.).

 

Thanks guys,

Crane

 

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  • cranebump changed the title to Leviathan 1 has been republished (and an apology to the Twitch team that ran it)
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Tweak notes

Spoiler
  • TOOK OUT THE FAILURE ELEMENT (sheesh)
  • Culled allies by 1 (and made them optional).
  • Changed placement of objectives, in the hopes of limiting the back and forth.
  • Cleaned up objective Nav text in Finale
  • Change Saracen's Ally text (it was inaccurate, with the rewrite, which folds this arc in with the Mobius arc).
  • Removed the Ordinary People spoiler in Freitag's speech on Blue Steel.
  • Fix typos

 

Now to fix Ordinary People (timers, timers, timers).

 

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Looking for SFMA content over multiple arcs? Search for the following under "cranebump." LONG FORM: Ordinary People [3 parts] Investigation of a series of thefts leads you deep into a vengeful plot that threatens all of Paragon City. Will you and Kings Row's "ordinary" heroes be able to stop it? Leviathan [5 parts] The  assassination of a local politician with national aspirations sets off a media frenzy among everyone's favorite reactionary network, NewsAnon. Among their targets? You. Mobius [5 Parts]:  Visions of past, present, and possibility collide, as you and the Autumn Wards unravel the mystery of the 7-year time gap. The Cage Series [3 parts]: The Iron Widow is back! Or...is she? Your vigilante philosophy is put to the test in this tale of shifting loyalties and outright deceit.  The Bleed [3 parts]: Your investigation of arcane fissures in IP leads you to uncover a 100-year old secret shrouded in magic, blood, and betrayal. LF feedback: Noble Mettle [2 parts]: A Sky Raider raid on the Paragon Commodities Commission turns from simple kidnapping to a complicated scheme involving mercenaries, "Communists," economics, and chemistry. One Shots:  Of Guns and Asa Ronan; The Tenuous State of Grace; Garden of the Will; Gravity; The Book of Bond's; The Lost Girls; Injustice Systems; Wednesday’s Wyverns; Of ‘Dine and Men; Dark Legacy; Shadow and Silver, The Re-education of Westin Phipps

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Okay, it did not keep my changes, so I may need to pull it down and then republish it from there. Working on it.

 

Fixed. I hope.

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