Story Arc ID : 19738

[Darkneblade]

First mission that looks like story mission at least need feedback.

[Kyksie]

Spectral Eclipse: Origin  #19738

 

The contact is Spectral Eclipse, who tells you that he is now dead, and you're getting an automated voice message telling you to feed his dog or whatever. He must have been typing it with one hand while bleeding out, because the grammar is really, really bad. No contact bio, and the sendoff and still busy texts are all one sentence.

 

For some reason, the player is sent to the ruined city map, where that dude's minions are fighting Praetorian ghouls for some reason. There's a custom group, 'military soldier' or something, with only one type and no bio. The player clicks a portal, then smashes a Shadow Cyst, which for some reason mind controls the player. I'm using the phrase "for some reason" a lot, but that's what playing this arc feels like. After that, the nav bar says "Bologna egg" or something... it's another Cyst Crystal, but it's being attacked, and if you don't get there fast enough the mission fails! Then you clobber a guy, then find a 'sacrifice', then lead him across the map to the egg. Congratulations, you've resurrected the Big Nasty.

 

This arc is a dumpster fire: sparse writing, terrible grammar, missing details, tedious glowie hunts, possible failure, no real story. Worst of all, players do not enjoy being mind controlled and made to do the villain's dirty deeds. Heroes want to save the world, villains want to rob banks, and Praetorians want to, uh, I dunno, sniff Dominatrix's panties or something. An arc that isn't marked as villainous should have the player catch the bank robbers, rescue the girl, and vanquish the world-threatening archvillain, although you can throw in Dominatrix's panties if you really want to. I won't mind. Honest.

Edited December 13, 2019 by Kyksie

[Lazarillo]

54 minutes ago, Kyksie said:

although you can throw in Dominatrix's panties if you really want to. I won't mind. Honest.

There isn't a defense set in the game that provides enough Toxic resistance for such a dream to be viable.

[Darkneblade]

I edited a lot, it is suppose to be bit better now.

[Kyksie]

With the latest revision, Spectral Eclipse: Origin becomes the next Great American Novel. The protagonist receives a desperate message from a dying Spectral Eclipse, warning of the imminent resurrection of his arch-nemesis, Bologna Man. The player ventures into a war-torn hellscape, where vanquished Praetorian soldiers fight desperately against the ghostly remains of the dying army. Small groups of military specialists roam the field, beholden to no one, frantically trying to determine which forces pose the greatest threat. The player shuts down five portals, then destroys a malign Shadow Cyst, but in a shocking twist the player is infected with an unknown parasite, bending him to the entity's will.

 

Now, the player is tasked with capturing five civilians and transporting them to the cyst, where their souls are extracted and used to fuel Bologna's resurrection. A series of clues chronicles the protagonist's inner struggle against the alien mind control, desperately pitting his last scraps of humanity against the insatiable hunger of an aeons-old beast. As the last man's soul is consumed and the ancient god reawakens, Spectral Eclipse: Origins becomes a dark mirror reflecting the harsh truth of the human condition, wherein-

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Ha ha ha who am I kidding, it's still a raging dumpster fire. Terrible grammar and spelling, sparse detail, no real story. The only real change is that there are now five glowies and five hostages instead of one each, making the arc five times as tedious. Stay away.